UC Application- Personal statement

Few days ago, I had make a order for my Personal statement to transfer to UC university, and I am going to upload the file once again to let you edit. The purpose of this order is to make my Personal Statement more perfect, and also avoid the University know that my personal statement was not written by myself. If the writer recognize my personal statement was written by him/her, please let another writer work on my Personal statement. Also, for the first question, I want to talk more about my summer job, and less about volunteer work. In addition, I want to talk more about what I have learn in the summer job. I want it be like 60-65% for the summer job and 35-40% for the volunteer work.